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Post by frankthetriviaman on Apr 21, 2016 6:47:04 GMT -5
"Who indeed." Gunnarson replied, "anyway, it was..."
"Oh Gunnarson just do it in chronological order! It will make more sense that way." Gent said suddenly. "So what happened just before the first murder?"
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Post by Biblically Accurate Angel on Apr 21, 2016 11:44:55 GMT -5
"Alright! Let me say this briefly before I get all confused:
-The man (I somehow forgot his name) was murdered by Elvira. -Mrs. Walters was murdered by Mr. Walters. -The shopkeeper was murdered by Elvira. -I was attacked. -Now, murder #5, which did not succeed - Gelb."
"Me?!" "Yes! For you see, with you out of the way, Elvira and Mr. Walters could get married." *Profanities* "Well, I think I get it," said Gent. "I'll come back for the details, Gunnarson, but I better take these crooks away first." "Wait!" cried Elvira. "Before I go, I'd like to tell you there's one thing missing." "What is missing?" "The sixth crime: I - I - sank the Caledonia."
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Post by frankthetriviaman on Apr 21, 2016 12:54:38 GMT -5
(His last name was Farley)
"Now you're being crazy; she was sunk by a u-boat." Gent pointed out as he began taking the criminals away. "But that still doesn't explain how half of Gelb's scarf ended up in Farley's hand, or the coded notes" he pointed out as they were lead away.
*wait, was Gelb meant to be a murderer or murdered?
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Post by Biblically Accurate Angel on Apr 21, 2016 13:02:55 GMT -5
"Oh! the English!" cried Gunnarson, "haven't I already told you that he WAS FRAMED?!" Elvira slapped Gent. "That wasn't a U-Boat, you damn inspector. I blew it up to look it was."
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Post by frankthetriviaman on Apr 21, 2016 13:12:22 GMT -5
"No, I mean your wording on the last one was confusing; was Gelb meant to be the fifth murder?" He clarified. Then he looked at Elvira. "What? But why? It was just a steamer, and a civilian one" he pointed out.
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Post by Biblically Accurate Angel on Apr 21, 2016 13:32:39 GMT -5
"No, I mean," said Gunnarson, "that Gelb was framed and found guilty... and hung! That would have been the fifth murder."
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Post by frankthetriviaman on Apr 21, 2016 13:55:59 GMT -5
"But then, why would Gelb confess to a crime he did not commit?" Gent asked; it was the one missing piece of the puzzle
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Post by Biblically Accurate Angel on Apr 21, 2016 14:07:29 GMT -5
"I told you already - he loved Elvira!"
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Post by Tug on Apr 21, 2016 14:16:15 GMT -5
*the First Murder was when associate to "Ms. Walters" was murdered by what she thought was espionage and then she was murdered by a group of Germans....
"What wasn't Ms. Walters quoted as being shot then a group of Germans came towards you before the raid occurred, and weren't you the star witness to that one as well?" asked Gent even more confused
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Post by Biblically Accurate Angel on Apr 21, 2016 14:20:34 GMT -5
"Yes, BUT THE RAID WAS STAGED!"
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Post by frankthetriviaman on Apr 21, 2016 14:49:30 GMT -5
Deciding that this case had gone on long enough, Gent took away Elvira ad Reginald and let Gelb go.
"Tell me, why go through the effort to stage a raid when you apparently killed her anyway". Gent asked once they were in their cells.
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Post by Biblically Accurate Angel on Apr 21, 2016 14:54:47 GMT -5
"So that it would look like she was killed in the raid." "Thank you," said Gelb, "but..." "I understand. Men hรฅlla humรถret upp. Your wounds will heal in time..." THE END
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Post by frankthetriviaman on Apr 21, 2016 22:29:24 GMT -5
I'll set up the next one.
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Post by frankthetriviaman on Sept 15, 2016 16:04:22 GMT -5
So... I've been thinking guys, this story could use some improvement.
Let's face it- a lot of questions went unanswered, the twist ending made no sense, half the time no explanations were given for anything and there were times when we just outright contradicted each other, and the first murder we spent almost no time on.
I think we need to write a remaster of this story, because I know we can do better. The plot for the most part will be the same, we just need to make improvements so the story flows better.
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Post by Biblically Accurate Angel on Sept 15, 2016 16:30:17 GMT -5
I'd say we should leave it as a reminiscent of when the LMs weren't nearly as good or sophisticated as they are now.
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Post by frankthetriviaman on Sept 15, 2016 16:42:54 GMT -5
Well yea, I'm not saying get rid of the original; I'm saying let's also write a remaster that doesn't cause as much confusion as this one did
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Post by Biblically Accurate Angel on Sept 15, 2016 17:39:55 GMT -5
I'm afraid, though, that if we remastered this, we'd also have to remaster #5, since this one was worked out in that one.
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Post by frankthetriviaman on Sept 15, 2016 18:00:04 GMT -5
Exactly; the stuff we figured out in five, we apply here. I already got in introduction in mind, taking into account what we found out.
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Post by Biblically Accurate Angel on Sept 15, 2016 18:07:00 GMT -5
Yes but that would change 5 as they'd already know what happened.
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Post by Tug on Sept 15, 2016 18:59:27 GMT -5
Who says we answer everything like it came to light in %, why not end it in the same conclusions as in here, but have an ending involving Drugg and Taylor that reveals the truth
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