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Post by Admin on Dec 27, 2015 1:44:02 GMT -5
I think that a novel detailing Diesel 10's life will be good. First off, D-11, how much of TATMRR will you include in the parts detailing Diesel 10 in your novel? For now I will start at the end of the chase scene.
I was going insane. I felt anger boiling inside of me as I ran after the Blue Puffball and Lady. We approached the viaduct. Lady made it across the braking section fine, but Thomas slowed down slightly when approaching the breaking part. I noticed this and raced forward in an attempt to push Thomas off. Thomas went across and made it, surprised by this I lost concentration on moving and I raced off the viaduct, grabbing on to a one wood plank, it was that plank that gave me a different fate to Diesel 14, god rest his soul. The plank broke off and I fell down into a barge, falling unconcious. I woke up later in a siding at a military base, but I realized that they forgot to remove my APS, I wanted to see Diesels 18 and 19 but I knew that my best priority was to get out. I waited until nobody was looking and raced off towards the entrance, plowing through it with my claw. I was running out of fuel and raced into a shed, the doors closing behind me. I waited for at least 6 hours, as I saw on the clock in the shed, before going out and just barely making it to the oil depot, and I loaded up on fuel. my claw had run out of hydraulic fuel, and I knew I wasn't going to find that easily. I went as far as I could, and loaded up on fuel again, I then noticed something that made... A human would say his heart jumped if out in the same situation.
End of the prologue.
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Post by frankthetriviaman on Dec 27, 2015 1:49:50 GMT -5
Its a good premise, but it still needs work. For starters, there would be sludge in his engine, so he wouldn't be going anywhere. And also, without a crane he would not be able to get out of the barge.
Not a problem though; with some discussion among all of us, these holes can be filled in quite easily.
edit: sorry, I saw you said he awoke in a siding, so he was unloaded, sorry about that, so the military did get him out of the barge. But there is still the question of sludge in the engine
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Post by Biblically Accurate Angel on Dec 27, 2015 2:14:59 GMT -5
While this would be going down a different route than I have planned, it does look interesting, Admin.
Answering your question - I'm planning to have two entire parts with Diesel 10 - one for his first arrival on Sodor, and the other with the TATMRR scenes.
Frank's idea of Diesels 10-12 going insane was a bit surprising to me when he first brought it up in a TinyChat we had, as I had had a totally different idea as to how it would go, but honestly, his idea made much more sense.
I would advise against anything being done with the Numbered Diesels until my novel is complete (which won't be for a while), but go ahead; I love seeing different stories based on them.
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Post by frankthetriviaman on Dec 27, 2015 21:30:04 GMT -5
How about this TGC:
While D-10 was unconscious, it turns out the military did have plans for him, and they willingly raised him out of the barge and cleaned out his engine, but inexperienced men forgot to turn off the APS so he was able to make his escape.
But a more important question: what kind of things did you have planned for this story?
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Post by Admin on Dec 27, 2015 22:28:21 GMT -5
I was thinking about 3WSR as a whole, and I had a few ideas for that in his insanity he kept having weird dreams, referring to the Diesel 10's reign arc, but I'll just edit the ones we have recovered so we can get it out faster, then I'll move on to the war of the shards, Diesel 10 and Diesel 11's motive for collecting the shards, and finally how they met D-11.
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Post by frankthetriviaman on Jan 30, 2016 0:32:05 GMT -5
Oh yes; that is a good point. I have been meaning to so some arc recovery, but something always gets in my way. Thanks for reminding me.
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Post by Admin on Feb 15, 2016 15:39:42 GMT -5
I've finished the basic parts of Chapter one, tell me if it needs anything.
Chapter One: Dreams
"Splodge?!" I said. "Yes, old boss, it is us, Splatter and Dodge." Splatter said. "I'll tell you for one last time, I don't have time to say both names!" I said. "Well we don't have time to bother with you." Dodge said as the two pushed me into a ditch.
I woke up later, a crane putting me back on the rails. My APS was still on, so I raced off to the engine shed. The air conditioning had broke so the engines were very annoyed and an argument was breaking out between them. I could only hear part of it. "If it weren't for you little engines getting in our shed we wouldn't need to waste the AC!" Gordon said. "Oh we are the problem, Bigger engines need more cool air, so if you all went to Knapford shed like the only sensible big engine Murdoch the air conditioner wouldn't be broken!" Percy said. "Everybody be quiet for a minute!" Edward said. "The Air Conditioning has been broken since old stuck up barged through the wall, we just didn't need it until now." Then I arrived on the turntable. "Oh big surprise, another diesel arrived to suck up bowler caps, break our shed and AC, chase us, and make Henry look strong" James said. "Today is the last day you steam engines are on this island. You will be scrapped before the month is over, and then you will be complaining about there not being any cool air. Or in other words, your firebox will be on fire." I said. "What?" Henry said. "Just making sure you are awake." I said, but it didn't sound like my voice.
I woke up in a siding by Knapford, in front of a shed. remembering the voice it kind of sounded like one of my brothers, probably in my phase of diesels. I crunched my claw and it had fuel. I then heard someone else crunching their claw. In front of me was Bear, with his own claw. "I've been your replacement since you left, and I'm the one who sent Splodge after you." Bear said. "Well I'm getting my henchmen back!" I said, extending my claw at Bear's, Bear's claw turned at the end, and grabbed mine, but I managed to snap Bear's off. I started pushing Bear and we approached some buffers by a hill. I pushed Bear into the buffers, which snapped off just like the ones behind James did in the scrap yard. But there was no Mr. Conductor to save Bear, and I pushed him off the rails and down a hill. But then Henry raced behind me and pushed me off. "That was for my friend. Diesel 10."
I woke up again, this time in a siding by Diesel. My claw had no fuel in it. My APS was off, and I had no diesel fuel anyways. Diesel then spoke to me. "I have a small tank full of hydraulic fuel in it, let's fill up your tank and get rid of these steam engines, Diesel 261 is also somewhere around the island. You want to get revenge on Splodge right? 261 and I can help you." Diesel said. Thomas and Percy are going to the scrap yards tonight. We could probably surprise attack them and push them in." Diesel said. "Give me the fuel and we'll get to finding 261." I said. That night, we had not found 261, but we could do the job on our own. We crept into the scrap yard and looked. I saw Thomas, Percy, and I'm front of Thomas, Duck! We could get another engine as well. I went behind Thomas and Duck, Diesel went behind Percy, and we both rammed into them, pushing them past the broken buffers I broke trying to push James off, and down, into the melting pit below.
Suddenly, a giant hand reached down onto me and Diesel, and removed us from the island model where the engines lived, he then picked up Thomas, Percy, and Duck from the melting put, which really was and orange box, and put them back on the rails. They were the hands of Mr. Mitton, who oversaw the model railway where the engines lived. "You two have been very bad engines. I'm afraid I am going to have to put you both in the reject room until you learn to behave." "No! Anything but that!" I cried out, but it was no use. Soon, Diesel and I found ourselves on a dust covered shelf with Bash, Dash, Ferdinand, Dennis, and Billy. "Hello there! Welcome..." "to the reject shelf!" "That's right!" "I'm such a lazy engine." "Shut up! You're just a bossy boiler!" "AAAHHHHH!!!!!!" Diesel and I screamed together
"Thomas? Thomas! Wake up!" Thomas suddenly awoke, he was in the shed. "Get going Thomas, you are running late." Sir Topham Hatt said. "What? Oh, sorry sir, I was having a nightmare about Diesel 10" and he ran off to get Annie and Clarabel. At the coach shed I ran behind Thomas, but too loudly. "Driver, driver, move." Thomas said. Thomas started racing down the tracks. I found my claw had hydraulic fuel in it again and snapped at the sky. A better narrator came in. We ended up at Brendam, Thomas raced to the end of the dock, but the line was set for Fergus to shunt some trucks into a siding. Thomas bumped into Fergus. I tried to run into the two engines, but I couldn't. My driver prevented me from doing it.
I suddenly appeared on a set of rails leading to a fountain with a unicorn on it. The unicorn awoke and said "what is your wish?" "I wish nothing could prevent me from doing what I want." I said. I reappeared behind Thomas and Fergus, and I pushed them off the dock and into the water below. Suddenly, I found myself surrounded by a lot of people. It was the autistic community, and they were not too pleased about the destruction of their beloved character and show.
"You have pushed things too far Diesel 10!" "How could you do this to our favorite character!" "You've got some nerve!" "You're going to pay for this!"
"Now wait, I can explain..." I said, but it was too late; the fans of the show picked me up and brought him to the edge of the cliffside. I was thrown off the rocks and crashed into the sea. I started hallucinating and started to see a face I had not saw in the longest time. Diesel 14. I managed to crack a smile at the engine before hitting the rocks below.
The unicorn appeared before me "I am here to tell you that your wish has been revoked." "What, why!?" I said in shock. "Wishes are sacred blessings, and must be treated as such. You have abused your wish so much it is repulsive. As punishment, not only is your wish revoked, but your memory of these events shall be wiped, and you will be made to believe that you work elsewhere." "NOOO!!!!" I said, but it was too late; I was engulfed in a whirlwind and disappeared. The damage to Sodor was undone, and all destroyed engines were brought back, as if nothing had happened.
And in a small scrapyard on the mainland:
"Diesel 10! Get to work! Load that scrap and get shunting!"
"Yes sir." I said as I used my claw to load scrap cars then shunt them.
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Post by Biblically Accurate Angel on Feb 15, 2016 16:00:41 GMT -5
Oh wow... This is definitely going down a totally different path that I intend to go down, but still โ excellent work Admin!
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Post by frankthetriviaman on Feb 15, 2016 16:18:24 GMT -5
Oh yes, great work! I am curious as to where the rest of this is going to go.
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Post by Admin on Feb 16, 2016 2:22:48 GMT -5
Did you see the Diesel 13 reference? Also, I kind of added a lot of things to Diesel 10's reign, the only things that were recovered were 3 dreams and the ending, I remembered the beginning with the AC being broken in Tidmouth, but added the argument. Also, did you see the reference to Season 6 of the TVS?
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Post by frankthetriviaman on Feb 16, 2016 10:27:47 GMT -5
I'm embarrassed to say this, but no, I couldn't find the Diesel 13 and Seqason 6 references. Where were they?
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Post by Biblically Accurate Angel on Feb 16, 2016 10:42:07 GMT -5
I'm embarrassed to say this, but no, I couldn't find the Diesel 13 and Seqason 6 references. Where were they? To tell the truth, I didn't notice it either.
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Post by Admin on Feb 16, 2016 11:08:52 GMT -5
The voice was Diesel 13, and he was in the shed by Knapford, notice how I mentioned that the voice was from Diesel 10's phase of numbered diesels, and the Season 6 reference is that the situation described at the smelters is ment to mirror "Scaredy Engines".
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Post by frankthetriviaman on Mar 1, 2016 22:42:53 GMT -5
Ah, I see.
BTW, what will the next chapter cover?
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Post by Biblically Accurate Angel on Aug 13, 2017 22:19:11 GMT -5
Dammit I was rereading this just now because I found it again. Admin come back.
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Post by Admin on Aug 21, 2017 20:33:14 GMT -5
Ok what is it? Btw I kind of don't know where I was gonna go with this
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